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Should married women work? Is the sky blue? These questions do not need answers, they are plainly obvious. It seems trivial for anyone to question if a married woman should work. Why is a married woman any different from an unmarried woman, and more importantly why is any woman at all different from a man?
        Our society is crumbling. Less and less people are working, relying on the government to pay for their lives. What happened to Britains 'get up and go' attitude, getting through whatever troubles and working no matter what? Now people want any excuse to avoid having to do the slightest bit of work. Surely this pathetic attitude towards work and society should be motivation enough for any man or woman to want to work.
        I would like to marry and become a mother as much as the next woman but this aspiration in no way means that I will suddenly want to become dependant on my husband when I settle down. If I was to bring a life into the world, I believe it would be more my responsibility than anyone elses to provide for that life. Granted, I would want a good few months after giving birth to stay off work, put my feet up and watch daytime television, but this in no way means I would want to give up work for good! I feel I am too much of an independent person to suddenly give everything up and dedicate my life to cooking, cleaning and mothering. This is not to say that I would never cook, clean or be an active mother, but I feel that every lifestyle needs a healthy balance and if you eliminate all of something from your life in favour of something else, it is not a decent balance.
        It seems futile for women to have fought so hard for the vote and equal rights for so long, if no women want to be equal!§


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I started my essay with a rhetorical question to engage my audience and make them want to continue reading. I structured my writing featuring a short introduction in which I asked questions and simply introduced what I'd be talking about, I tried not to give too much of my opinion away too quickly.
        I started my second paragraph with a short, shocking statement. I feel that this keeps the reader interested as it's such a shocking statement therefore meaning they would want to read on and read further evidence to back this point up.
        In my third paragraph, I drew from personal experience in order to give a personal, more involved approach to my writing. I believe that the audience will agree with an opinion more if it is backed up and the writer has personal experience in the issue.