Holly and Jessica - We'll Never Know Recast Task

Ian Huntley - True Crime
Ian Huntley. A boyfriend. A caretaker. A killer. Huntley was guilty from the first instance, as much as he wanted to invent other "reasonable explanations" and hope that his tears could get him out of it, he was doomed to be found out. The amount of damning evidence piling up against him was too much for him to worm his way out of, his disgusting crime was sure to be discovered.
        He assured the court that he had simply been washing his dog on that fateful day, only stopping to speak to Holly and Jessica when they stopped by to ask how his girlfriend (one of their teachers) was doing. It was as if he was painting a perfect image of himself, making up a fairytale of the perfect sunny Sunday afternoon, but the grisly truth was all too different.
        The court explained the mounting evidence (the fingerprints, the car tracks etc) and he became increasingly aggravated when he realised that perhaps he was destined to being found out. He snapped "You've already made up your mind", giving the impression that maybe he felt victimised. Maybe he felt that he really was innocent. Maybe he felt that he was being picked on and he was being falsely accused, as if they had some kind of vendetta against him.
        They say that only 40 per cent of murderers actually recall the moment of the killing. Perhaps Huntley wants to be in that minority, he wants to be someone to have an excuse and almost pass off the responsibility of the crime.
        Nobody will ever really know if Huntley knows what he did or if he actually believes the story he created. Some things will always be a secret.

Commentary
The short opening sentences capture the audiences attention and let the reader know what the article is going to be about, I think it is effective because the short sentences are powerful and dramatic. The powerful words like "grisly", "vendetta" and "disgusting" are dramatic and emotive, they show the strength of his crime and how horrible it is. The use of facts and extracts taken from the original text (Holly and Jessica - We'll Never Know) makes the link between the two texts and therefore achieves the aim of the text.